Editing Talk:Censorship of TikTok (section)

== Peer Review ==

This article starts off strong especially with the great number of citations that are included to support the context of the material. The article starts off by mentioning ByteDance with a link to what exactly Bytedance is, however, in regards to this specific page it would be helpful to the reader to know some brief context about Bytedance and what connection it has to own Tiktok. The article then sharply transitions into citing pornography concerns, there could possibly be a smoother transition included here. I believe mentioning a variety of countries contributes to a strong point about censorship because it displays how different government systems deal with censorship over the media. The article links a different article when referencing the United States; in order to make this article more appealing and detailed in context, the United States should have some sort of mention and be talked about in detail. The United States is greatly known for having an issue with TikTok in 2020 so this should be highlighted. There also should be specific examples of media that were considered censored, this would add a better understanding of just how censored TikTok was in multiple countries. The article's strongest aspect is its elaboration on the ban in India; greater detail in other countries would be helpful to get a broader aspect on this issue. [[User:Maddydowling27|Maddydowling27]] ([[User talk:Maddydowling27|talk]]) 05:59, 12 October 2021 (UTC)