Editing Eurovision Wiki:Teahouse (section)

== Feedback for my first Wikipedia Page! ==

Hello all! I have just created a Wikipedia page for the first time. I would appreciate all feedback for my new page, [[Home Base Program]], as any and all feedback will help my Wikipedia experience!  [[User:Donohue55|Donohue55]] ([[User talk:Donohue55|talk]]) 03:34, 17 March 2026 (UTC)

:The "Mission" section has some issues with unencyclopedic tone; the first two sentences are puffery that read like they were copied directly from the organisation's mission statement, and don't really tell us anything useful about the organisation's actual operations. {{tq|Home Base aims to support those who served their countries, no matter their discharge status. The organization works with veterans, active service members, and their families to face the invisible wounds that remain after their service.}}
:"Support" how? What "invisible wounds?" This kind of prose is appropriate for a charity's website trying to drum up sympathy and support, but not for an encyclopedia which should be neutrally summarising the details of this organisation. "Home Base provides medical and psychiatric care to veterans" or something to that effect would be more than suitable.
:{{tq|The program's care is offered across the country, {{strike|as it aims to help, no matter the participant's location.}}}} Same thing here. You can just get rid of that whole second part, it serves no additional informational purpose.
:{{tq|The organization is expanding their clinical worker further, as Home Base Arizona is in the works.}} It's [[WP:CRYSTAL|generally inappropriate]] for Wikipedia to report on future events. As that page says, "Individual scheduled or expected future events should be included only if the '''event is notable''' and almost certain to take place." An expansion of an organisation's scope is [[WP:CORPTRIV|routine operations]] and therefore is not 'notable' enough to warrant mentioning. We wouldn't expect the article for [[McDonalds]] to report that a new store is opening in Podunk. [[User:Athanelar|Athanelar]] ([[User talk:Athanelar|talk]]) 03:46, 17 March 2026 (UTC)
::I added a Tone cleanup template to the Mission section as per @[[User:Athanelar|Athanelar]]'s advice. Happy editing! [[User:Paolo Roland Self|Paolo Roland Self]] ([[User talk:Paolo Roland Self|talk]]) 04:24, 17 March 2026 (UTC)
::You really should have submitted it for review via [[WP:AFC]]. This isn't ready for mainspace. You can move it to [[Draft:Home Base Program]] if you want and add <nowiki>{{subst:AFC draft}}</nowiki> at the top, which provides a button for you to submit it when you're ready. ~[[User:Anachronist|Anachronist]] (who / me) <small>([[User talk:Anachronist|talk]])</small> 04:58, 17 March 2026 (UTC)
:I am not a reviewer, rather passing by user. 
:In my humble opinion Home Base Program associates with New York City and not with Boston.
:Plenty of cities might have a home base program. [[User:Matjung|Matjung]] ([[User talk:Matjung|talk]]) 19:02, 17 March 2026 (UTC)